汇丰银行商务写作教程(8)

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今天我们来继续学习怎样起草和修改信件。
Drafting: How To Do It
LETTER TO MR PERRY: DRAFTING
Now that you know what drafting is all about, you can draft the letter to Mr Perry.
To do this, you need to have your plan with you so you can write according to your plan. You also need a pen and paper.

Remember the two strategies when you draft:
Keep writing
Don't edit.
LETTER TO MR PERRY
Use the information on this screen to draft a letter.

Situation:
Our customer, Mr Robert Perry, deposited a cheque through 'Quick Deposit' into his Premier account. Unfortunately, the name on the cheque (the bearer's name) was not exactly the same as the name on the account. The name on the cheque was Mr Robert Pery (not Perry). As a result, the money was not credited to Mr Perry's account.

Solution:
Mr Perry needs to ask the drawer to write another cheque, making sure the name is exactly the same as on the account card. Then, the money can be deposited into this account.

Account Details:
Name: Mr Perry
Address: Flat 3A, Bayshore Tower, Mary's Point, Vancouver
Account No.: 613 556556 888
Cheque No.: 60263
Payee Name: Mr R Pery
Name on Account Record: Mr R Perry

When you finish, write "First Draft" on the top margin of your letter. You'll work on the draft later in this chapter and also in Chapters 4-6 and 8.

Revising: Why Do It
You've now completed your draft, and you're ready to move on to the next stage of the Writing Process: Revise.
Why do you think revising is important?
Revising your writing transforms your unfinished draft into an effective letter that gets results.
In fact, revising is so important that you often need to revise your writing several times. This is the longest stage in the Writing Process.
To see why revising is important, look at the letter below. The writer has forgotten to revise it. As you read the letter, think about the three questions in the box on the right.

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